First Cut & Feedback

This is the first cut of our entire film opening. We edited and put together all of these clips in order to create a simpler version of what our final product will be. We have added a title to the end of the film and an ident at the start, but we have not yet added music or credits. By having this first cut of our film it allows us to see what our film is missing and what we could do to enhance the mood and convey the story more effectively. 

Reaction:
We asked two of our classmates to review our film and give us feedback on what we could change to make our overall production more effective. Molly and Jess are also within our target audience as they are both between 16-17 years old. 

Things we did well:  
I believe that the story of our main protagonist has been conveyed well. Through this film we see her deteriorate and I believe that our use of makeup and editing of the tone and lighting of the clips helped to convey this. We also added sound effects into this first cut which I think helped to shape the mood of the scene as well. For example we used bird song in some of the scenes in order to give out a feeling of calmness and then in later scenes we added harsh static sounds to introduce an idea of a distorted reality which further enforced the fact that our main character has experienced extreme emotional trauma. 
I am also happy with the ident and title sequence and do not think that we will do much more to improve it. However we did receive feedback from Molly and Jess in which both seemed to think that we should darken it so that it fits in better with the genre. We will be making these small changes in order to make our film more appropriate for our target audience.

Things to improve: 
Molly and Jess also believed that our production could be improved with additional dialogue. This is something that we will have to discuss adding into our film as we originally were not including dialogue as we firstly took inspiration for the narrative from up (which features no dialogue between the characters). We will watch our film and find appropriate moments for dialogue to be added and then discuss whether  we think it will improve our film or in actuality, take away from our original narrative choices. We were also told that our film would be improved with the addition of tense/ creepy instrumental music. This is our next step in the editing process and we will be adding similar music as that described by Molly and Jess. 
Also, personally, I feel that although I am happy with the narrative structure of our film, we should make what happens to Character 2 more obvious. Therefore, after a discussion on what we could do to improve our production, we have decided to include images of a bloody hand and a knife, thus making it clear that this character has in fact died.